Song #1
Background
The songs that I end up posting here are essentially just exercises that turned well in my opinion. They don't have any rigid themes or real point. This one in particular is really more just based off of a rhythm I had in my head that I was luckily able to find words for fast enough that I could keep up with it and write them down. While the last verse probably seems to hint that there was some negativity in the vibe there actually wasn't. I think I just needed to resolve and balance the extreme overriding happiness in the first half with something and that's where my mind went.
Things I like: How naturally the meter/rhythm flowed into this poem, general feeling conveyed.
Things I don't like: Subject matter (more about love YAWN!), no real point, some lame metaphors "Open up and take flight" for example (bleh!)
Anyway, I hope to do some more of these. It's been interesting to see how gaining an appreciation for hip-hop has been affecting my writing. Maybe next I'll study some classical poetry. I think poets tend to do elegant, graceful prose better than rappers, whereas rappers really excel at creating a flow and emulating a beat with their words.
